Bleaker the Red-Nosed Blank-Flank

Alright where to begin.

First of the design is cute and all and the eyes have a nice color transition.

But the thing is the white space is hogging all of the attention. It's the first thing you see when looking at this piece. White and lots of it.
So I agree with some of the others. Crop the picture so you'll have less white space.

Second of all, I see you're using normal printing paper. Because the ink on the other side is shining through or your printer left an mark of what was printed last on this sheet. That's all fine and dandy, when you're working with just a grey pencil. But if you're working with markers, the thin paper will make them bleed.

Besides I can see two of your previous attempts at this drawing still on the paper so either you're pressing your pencil down way to hard, or your paper is too thin and your eraser couldn't erase them.

Which brings me to the third point. I can see in your previous attempt sketches, that you don't use guidelines. I highly sugest trying to learn how to use them, they'll make drawing for you a whole lot easier and it will help you improve. Unless you still don't want to improve then I've waisted a good five minutes with this comment. But hey at least I was trying to help you with some tips.

You see the way the lower part of the eyes go, it's like going in a downward line. Meaning the right eye isn't on the same hight as the left one. Or vice versa depending how you look at it.
It makes his face look quite flat. Just saying.

Lastly in the disclaimer you gave credit to the wrong person. Her ussername is *fyre-flye and not ~fyrflye. You might wanna correct that one before people start pointing it out.